1167343 - Copy editing for achievements app in Firefox OS (Spark)

Status: RESOLVED FIXED

(Marketing :: Design, task)

Description

[Amy Lee [:amylee] UX]

>>Project/Request Title:
Copy editing for achievements app in Firefox OS (Spark)

>>Project Overview:
To help introduce Spark features to users by giving them achievements after completing tasks. The achievements app language should be fun delightful.

>> Creative Help Needed:
Copy:    Yes 
Design:  No 
Video:   No 
Other:  No

>>Creative Specs:
This can be delivered in a word doc.

>>CTA and Design:
This is the link to our existing copy that hopefully can be improved:
https://etherpad.mozilla.org/achievements-list

Link to UX spec for line length/placement:
https://mozilla.app.box.com/s/quh630czdz5h5fxr90os3yukoan0ui27
Please refer to page 1, screen 2 - View list of achievements





>>Expected Launch Date:
2015-06-03

>>Mozilla Goal:
Firefox OS

>>Mozilla Creative Collective:
No

>>Points of Contact:
[e-mail], [e-mail]

Comment 1

[Matej Novak [:matej]]

Assigning this to Troy. Should be a quick, fun one.

Amy, is the June 3 due date still accurate?

Comment 2

[Amy Lee [:amylee] UX]

(In reply to Matej Novak [:matej] from comment #1)
> Assigning this to Troy. Should be a quick, fun one.
> 
> Amy, is the June 3 due date still accurate?

Yes June 3rd is correct. Let me know if this is works. Thanks!

Comment 3

[Amy Lee [:amylee] UX]

Hi, 

Just wanted to follow-up on the status of the copy? 

Thanks!

Comment 4

[Troy Palmer]

Hi Amy

I've shared my copy with Matej. Now just working on some revisions. Aiming to have something to share later today.

Comment 5

[Troy Palmer]

Hey again

Here is the link to my copy doc. 

Let me know if you have any questions, otherwise I'll just stay tuned for comments in the doc.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1genxin8xMYVrcdRSDDPhI2MYvtmCRmv2A7zxiMrs0-M/edit?usp=sharing

Thanks,
Troy

Comment 6

[Amy Lee [:amylee] UX]

(In reply to Troy Palmer from comment #5)
> Hey again
> 
> Here is the link to my copy doc. 
> 
> Let me know if you have any questions, otherwise I'll just stay tuned for
> comments in the doc.
> 
> https://docs.google.com/document/d/
> 1genxin8xMYVrcdRSDDPhI2MYvtmCRmv2A7zxiMrs0-M/edit?usp=sharing
> 
> Thanks,
> Troy

Hi Troy, 

Thanks for sending this over. This looks great. I've taken as much of the copy as I can. Due to tight timelines, I had to start designing the visuals for each badge alongside the copy editing. There were some instances where the visuals no longer made sense with the new copy so I had to stick with some of the old title names since we don't have time to redo some of the visuals. This is v1 of the release and for v2 I will revise the graphics so we can include the rest of the badges names with appropriate graphics. I hope this is okay.

Comment 7

[Amy Lee [:amylee] UX]

Attachment: Badges_Screen.png

Hi Troy, 

I've attached the final graphics for the badges and include the copy that you have provided where it made sense with the graphic. I was wondering if you had suggestions for badge titles that would still work with the graphics that I've attached.

Thanks!

Comment 8

[Troy Palmer]

Hi Amy

I'll give it some thought. When would you like (or need) to have stuff by?

Comment 9

[Amy Lee [:amylee] UX]

(In reply to Troy Palmer from comment #8)
> Hi Amy
> 
> I'll give it some thought. When would you like (or need) to have stuff by?

Hi Troy, 

In the next day or 2? Basically everything has to be done by this week because they are flashing the builds next week and I want to make sure the devs have time to put in the copy. Thanks!

Comment 10

[Troy Palmer]

Hi Amy

Here are some new options for you (hopefully that match your icons a little better).

Replace “Swipe Champ” with “Super Swiper”
Replace “Finders Keepers” with “Fab Finder”
Replace “Sharing is Caring” with “Share Master”
Replace “Creative Side” with “Creative Kind”

Let me know what you think.
Troy


(In reply to Amy Lee [:amylee] from comment #9)
> (In reply to Troy Palmer from comment #8)
> > Hi Amy
> > 
> > I'll give it some thought. When would you like (or need) to have stuff by?
> 
> Hi Troy, 
> 
> In the next day or 2? Basically everything has to be done by this week
> because they are flashing the builds next week and I want to make sure the
> devs have time to put in the copy. Thanks!

Comment 11

[Amy Lee [:amylee] UX]

(In reply to Troy Palmer from comment #10)
> Hi Amy
> 
> Here are some new options for you (hopefully that match your icons a little
> better).
> 
> Replace “Swipe Champ” with “Super Swiper”
> Replace “Finders Keepers” with “Fab Finder”
> Replace “Sharing is Caring” with “Share Master”
> Replace “Creative Side” with “Creative Kind”
> 
> Let me know what you think.
> Troy
> 
> 
> (In reply to Amy Lee [:amylee] from comment #9)
> > (In reply to Troy Palmer from comment #8)
> > > Hi Amy
> > > 
> > > I'll give it some thought. When would you like (or need) to have stuff by?
> > 
> > Hi Troy, 
> > 
> > In the next day or 2? Basically everything has to be done by this week
> > because they are flashing the builds next week and I want to make sure the
> > devs have time to put in the copy. Thanks!

Hi Troy, 

Thank you for getting back to me so quickly. I shared these with Jacqueline and we like all of them but would like to keep "Sharing is Caring" just because it feels a bit more friendlier. Thank you so much for your help!

Comment 12

[Jennifer Balaco]

Are you all set, Amy? If so, please go ahead and resolve the bug. Thanks!

Comment 13

[Amy Lee [:amylee] UX]

Thanks for the help! Resolving bug