Nit: "What is a Jetpack?" answer isn't very clear

RESOLVED FIXED

Status

Websites Graveyard
jetpackgallery.mozillalabs.com
P3
minor
RESOLVED FIXED
8 years ago
8 years ago

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(Reporter: abuchanan, Assigned: Kurt Cagle)

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Description

8 years ago
On the home page of the new Jetpack gallery...

"""
What is a Jetpack?

Jetpack is a newly formed experiment in using open Web technologies to enhance the browser, with the goal of allowing anyone who can build a Web site to participate in making the Web a better place to work, communicate and play.
"""

It seems convoluted and marketese-y to me.  I look at that block of text and my eyes go numb.  Since it's the main (actually, the only) copy above the fold on the home page, I suggest something more comprehensible and useful, like a bulleted list of the main points you want to get across.

I'm no wordsmith,

* New experiment in the open Web
* Simple tools for enhancing the browser
* Easy-to-use for anyone

At the very least, we should link to a page with more detailed information.


BUT, really this is a one-time question/answer, targeted at new users only.  Instead, you could answer the question "What can I do on this website?" (again, not a wordsmith)

* Find out what a Jetpack is
* Search/browse for Jetpacks
* Check out the most popular Jetpacks
* Find out how to make your own.  It's easy!
* yada yada

I really hope this is helpful and not overly picky.  If not, sorry.
The production version of the Jetpack introduction text is very different from the text in this bug, I believe it is much easier to understand now. 

As for the latter bullet list of concerns, we will be addressing the load and share of them here: https://developer.mozilla.org/en/Jetpack
Severity: normal → minor
Priority: -- → P3

Updated

8 years ago
Assignee: nobody → kurt.cagle
Committed the first paragraph.  Adding the entire text did not fit within the text block.

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Sending        application/views/home/home_index_featured.php
Transmitting file data .
Committed revision r63517.
Status: NEW → RESOLVED
Last Resolved: 8 years ago
Resolution: --- → FIXED

Updated

8 years ago
Component: jetpackgallery.mozillalabs.com → jetpackgallery.mozillalabs.com
Product: Websites → Websites Graveyard
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