756124 - Revise text on the "You're all set!" page

Status: RESOLVED FIXED

(Pancake Graveyard :: General, defect)

Description

[Deb Richardson [:dria] (plz NEEDINFO)]

That page is a bit "wall of texty" and people are just going to click through.  Should figure out how to make it more readable.

Also there are grammar/punctuation errors.

Comment 1

[Deb Richardson [:dria] (plz NEEDINFO)]

Proposed revision, will get Stuart to review & OK.

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== You're all set! ==

Welcome to Pancake!

Pancake can be used for <b>searching and browsing the web</b>, but with a bit of a twist.  Get started by entering a search term in the space above.

The more you use Pancake, <b>the smarter it will become</b> as it learns more about what you find interesting and useful.

<b>But expect the unexpected!</b>  This app will continue to grow and change in the coming months as we try out new ideas and gather your feedback about Pancake.

<b>Enjoy!</b>

<i>~ Team Pancake</i>
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Comment 2

[Deb Richardson [:dria] (plz NEEDINFO)]

re revised

== You're all set! ==

Welcome to Pancake!

Pancake can be used for <b>searching and browsing the web</b>, but with a bit of a twist.  Get started by entering a search term in the space above.

The more you use Pancake, <b>the smarter it will become</b> as it learns more about what you find interesting and useful.

<b>But expect the unexpected!</b> This app will continue to grow and change in the coming months as we try out new ideas around Search, Discovery, Social browsing, Interaction across devices and much more.

<b>Enjoy!</b>

<i>~ Team Pancake</i>

Comment 3

[Stuart Parmenter]

ok -- this latest rev looks good.

Comment 4

[Sam Foster [:sfoster] (he/him) out until 2024-05-26]

Fixed in https://bitbucket.org/mozillapancake/pancake/changeset/722a6eb94723